I love this story and am so lazy that I didn't review until chapter three. :D
I think my most favoritest element is that the pace is unhurried. It's a stroll, not a breakneck sprint to the end. You're taking your time with these characters but still moving them, and I love the way its presented.
One quibble: He considers it, taping a finger thoughtfully against his chin. Now, Ten isn't above taping his finger to his chin. However, I'm more inclined to assume he's tapping it instead? :D (Pardon my cheek; school is really getting to me. *sheepish grin*)
Anyway, I haunt your journal for updates of this sucker. It's brilliant, I love it, don't stop now. ♥
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Date: 2006-08-16 05:17 am (UTC)I think my most favoritest element is that the pace is unhurried. It's a stroll, not a breakneck sprint to the end. You're taking your time with these characters but still moving them, and I love the way its presented.
One quibble: He considers it, taping a finger thoughtfully against his chin. Now, Ten isn't above taping his finger to his chin. However, I'm more inclined to assume he's tapping it instead? :D (Pardon my cheek; school is really getting to me. *sheepish grin*)
Anyway, I haunt your journal for updates of this sucker. It's brilliant, I love it, don't stop now. ♥